good day to you, could you please provide me with some feedback when you get a chance? thank you in advance :)

thanks for your prompt response, i did like your design but i just don't think its quite what I'm looking for. i think this was more due to my brief than yourself. i have updated this and i hope this would be a bit clearer in what I'm looking for.
thank you

good day to you, could you please provide me with some feedback on my New design when you get a chance? thank you in advance :)