sir, please check my entry #21666971 #21666972

Kindly provide your feedback on my entry work, thanks

Hello Project Owner,
I've submitted some design proposals for your logo design according to your brief.
Please review my design and let me know if I am on right track and If you're looking for different designs, please let me know if you need any changes. If you don't like the design simply eliminate it, but don't rate it with 1, 2, 3 star.
Possible comment on my design would be much appreciated.
Thanks & regards,
Slant Line Media