Possible feedback on my entry would be muchly appreciated.
Thanks. 

any updates?

Hello, yes thanks. I am only submitting this to you. What we would like to have you do is:
Large dark red metallic half target as background. Then on top of that in for ground the "On the Mark Wallcovering" in large silver/gray lettering with wallpaper pattern in the letters. Hopefully that makes sense. Then under that in smaller font

hi madam,
any updates on revised design?

Please see updated brief.

hello madam,
i have submitted the updated design...

I added a new picture to the brief to show you better what i am looking for :-)