Good Day, If you have time, please review my design and let me know how I can improve. ( #24502843 )

Hello there,
I just submitted my design thought according to your brief.Please review my design and let me know if I am on right track. If you don't like my design, please eliminate those rather than giving 1 or 2 star rating.

Best.

Hi there,

Please provide your feedback on my design concept.

Thanks & Kind Regards,
Design Nation.